After Diwali

by Seshu Chamarty

Diwali sunset...
crackers begin killing
traffic sounds

brighter Diwali…
my face lighting up
with all those sweets

Diwali after…
the smoke outlives
all vanquished demons

this Diwali...
a lone lamp makes up
for missing uncle

04-Nov-2013

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Comments on this Poem

I consider them still haiku (also plural) as they have a season, Diwali (in Indian context,) besides being related to light and sound with a human element juxtaposed, and all verses with s/l/s lines udner 17 syllables, the last line for an 'Aha' effect. Somehow I don't put them under senryu for they are propound with little satire or humor. For a dilettante I am, at haiku, the second and third verse are accepted by Kala Ramesh in a haiku forum she monitors. Thanks for asking a right question, Padmaja ji.

Seshu Chamarty
04-Nov-2013 10:25 AM

All nice ones! But are these Haikus or Senryus?

Padmaja Iyengar
04-Nov-2013 08:24 AM

too good!

Rupradha
04-Nov-2013 04:18 AM