I agree with you, Bill. And, I have made the correction you have suggested. Thanks for your very empathetic reading and response. Regards R K
R.K.Singh 03-Mar-2015 04:26 AM
The gaps that open between physical intimacy and emotional intimacy or (dare I say it?) spiritual intimacy most effectively caught. One suggestion, if I may. Line 2 is a bit awkward and open to misreading as it stands. Maybe
You're my love tonight you knows me as you know your body
A few more words but, as long as each one contributes, not wordier.
